It is important for people to take risks, in both their professional lives and personal lives. Do the advantages of taking these risks outweigh the disadvantages?

In
this
modern era, it is increasingly common that people are willing to take risky actions and they are ready to face the consequence of
risk
in their professional and personal lives. I am generally in agreement with
this
contention due to the potential for better growth and advancement.
Firstly
, people who take risks in their
life’s
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are often called “Innovators” and more successful in their lives.
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Risk taking
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is an ability
which
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one should have and helps in expedite
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career’s
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goal
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. In
early
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stage of
life
,
risk
takers create their own path and never settle for less in professional as well as in personal lives. For instances
Risk
taking ability is common among all the successful entrepreneurs and achievers
such
as famous cricketer M.S. Dhoni quit
the
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government job and started his career in cricket from the scratch.
Moreover
,
individual
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individuals
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who has
risk
taking ability
are
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much more experienced, sharp, dynamic, mature, ambitious, and above all successful in their
life
However
, in today’s
world
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everything has
their
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own price.
Therefore
,
individuals
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who took
risk
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in the early stage of their
life
they need to struggle and quit their comfortable
life
whether professionally or personally.
For example
: Many families are not in support of those who took harsh steps in their
life
to do something big. Individuals do face challenges and struggle financially and emotionally.
Nevertheless
, all the hardships and
struggle
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are worth enough and At the end of the day, what matters is the output
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the process. To conclude, one should be open
for
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all the options in our
life
and should not be rigid and scared
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the difficulties and challenges
come
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along.
Thus
, giveaways of
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risk taking
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will outweigh its drawbacks for sure.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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