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For centuries, important parts of education have remained such as reading, writing and maths. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skill be made as a fourth skill to be added to the list. To what extent do you agree?

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Over the years,
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aspect
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 of schooling
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 stayed static
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 reading, writing and calculations. With the introduction of computers, some
people
 believe that mastering computer proficiency
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 added.
This
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this
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 in
communication
 and learning made very easy.
First
 and foremost, improvement in
communication
 is one of the enormous reasons
people
 believe the addition of
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 as a fourth skill will be of help.
This
 is because
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 the world has now turned into a global village where
people
 are moving
round
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 the world.
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 they need to get in touch with each other and
this
 has helped greatly
such
 that with just a click on the internet, one can see
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what ever
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 they want to say.
For example
, it was recently reported that with the invention of computers, letter writing has decreased to 5% as more
people
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stress themselves to write and post but can just call and the message will be delivered.
Besides
 improvement in
communication
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learning easy is another factor
that is
 worth considering. A key factor to
this
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,
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 students can stay in their comfort zone and attend lectures without necessarily coming
face
 to
face
 with their lectures.
Also
, assignments and other research works can be done
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faster and
easily
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 as there is no need to go to the library for
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.
For instance
, during the Covid pandemic, studies continued
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through out
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 without interruption with the help of computers. In conclusion, after considering the increase in
communication
 and studying without difficulty, I can say without any reservations that data
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 should be made
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 fourth skill.
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