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Mobile phones and the Internet have made it easy to stay in contact with other people. However, as a lot of time is spent using telephones and computers, there is less face-to-face contact and direct communication. Is the growing use of communications technology a positive or a negative development for society ?

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The
time
 of digitalization has improved all aspects of human
life
. Especially the way we communicate with each other is not still the same as before, because innovative technologies give people an opportunity to keep in touch with somebody from everywhere in the world. But, while we are able to call or message somebody, the amount of personal meetings in our
life
 is decreased.
This
 essay will argue that the benefits of
this
 new way of communication offset the drawbacks entailed by
this
 state of affairs, as mobile phones and the
Internet
 influence society in a positive way and take a part in the improvement of our future.
First
 of all, the possibility to communicate without personal contact saves people their working
time
 as by talking as by travelling to formal meetings so that workers become a lot of
time
, which can be invested in
further
 technology development.
Therefore
, through the replacement of personal meetings with
internet
 calls or messaging we can cut costs and reduce the consumption of natural sources needed for a journey.
Furthermore
, the
Internet
 and mobile phones make it easy to have a friendship with somebody who lives in another country.
Although
 there are many people who prefer to spend
time
 messaging or playing on a phone, real friendship couldn't be disturbed through
this
 new form of communication, because best friends will never lose the opportunity to meet with each other. In conclusion, it is clear, that using the
Internet
 and mobile phones is beneficial for society and makes a significant contribution to the convenience of our daily
life
. On balance, I recommend everybody to invest his knowledge and
time
 in innovation because only all together we can improve our future and the
life
 of our children.
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