In many countries paying things using mobile phone apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

Mobile
phone
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becoming an essential thing to each and every human being. Because of its advanced technology, now it is hard to imagine what we can not really do. Nowadays, individuals use mobile
programmes
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for various kinds of needs
such
as purchasing items, transferring money, and doing office-related work. In
this
essay, I am going to discuss the pros and cons of
this
new trend
while
giving my opinion
along with
a summary.
To begin
with, as the positive of using the programmes, mobile add-ons allowed communities to continue their work at difficult times.
For example
, during the COVID pandemic, people were grounded in their homes and they were not allowed to move away from their homes even to buy essentials for their day-to-day lives.
In addition
, they were asked to limit the number of contacts that they
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with the other people in their community. In
this
kind of situation, these add-ons helped people to move to a new normal where they were allowed to
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purchases through these smart apps and even pay for them on the same platform.
This
is one of the benefits the users
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when they use these software pieces. Even though it had benefits at the same time some concerns were raised. Mobile programmes had security concerns.
For instance
, during the same time period of the pandemic, The Island newspaper published an article about the apps which were vulnerable and had exploitation attacks from hackers.
Moreover
, some attachments had complaints about collecting more information from the user device than they actually need
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.
To sum up
my writing, In my opinion, though there are bugs and concerns with using these apps, we must use these technologies continuously since they ease our lives, and
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authorities must impose rules and regulations to protect users from being exposed to a crime.
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