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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffreing from health problems as a result eating too much fast food .It is necessary for governments for goevernments to impose a higher tax on this kind of fast food.

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Nowadays, more and more
people
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 are affected by fitness issues
such
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 as well-being and heart disease which are linked to overconsumption of cheap mass-produced
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 .Some public
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 the only so;caution is to make fast meals less affordable by taxing them highly .Despite the severity of the problem ,I think
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 is quite wrong .Increasing fast
food
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 would unfairly penalise
people
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 and may not necessarily bring about the desired
health
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 benefits.
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 ,fast
food
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 is about more than just nutrition .Many teenagers spend money on fast
food
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 because they need to eat out but
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 is how they socialise .Fast
food
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 restaurants provide a safe,convenient place for young
people
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 to meet friends .Denying
people
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 a small pleasure in life could affect their social lives or happiness. Another important point is that ,if the reason for taxing junk
food
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 is to reduce obesity ,it may be ineffective.It is true that fast
food
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 is high in sugar ,salt and fat ,all of which cause weight gain and are detrimental to our
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,
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 taxing there might be other factors which make it detrimental to our
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 as containing trans-fat .While a home-cooked meal is generally healthy,
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 is not always the case .I personally know a family that used to eat high-fat ,home-cooked
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 in enormous portions .They all suffered from
health
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 problems due to obesity. On the opposite ,I do understand the point of view of those who say ,drastic action is needed .If fast
food
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 was taxed and became expensive ,individuals would be forced to seek out healthier options .
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,
food
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 producers would have an incentive to provide healthier foods .
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,there is likely to be resistance from consumers and producers who want to have a greater choice. To conclude,
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 imposing a higher tax on fast snacks could have more positive effects ,these would be outweighed by the drawbacks .For one thing ,some sectors of society would feel victimised ,and there is
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 the fact that simply raising taxes would not result in a much healthier society .What we really need is a greater awareness of diet and cheaper healthy cuisine,
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