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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

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Recently, there are arguments about the workplace of professionals
such
 as doctors and engineers The proponents believe that they should serve the
country
 where they were trained, and the opponents give the opinions that
people
 have the right to choose where they want to develop their careers. The following essay is about both two points of view, followed by my thoughts that support the latter. The major reason why it is not good to force
people
 in choosing workplaces is their homeland. Not every
country
 can meet the professional training's obligations, leading to many
people
 who want to receive higher education need to study abroad. In that circumstance, if these
people
 were forced to stay abroad, their
countries
 would easily encounter a brain drain problem. Afterwards, it is literally hard to predict the future development of these
countries
. In
this
 modern society, white-collar workers play a truly essential role in
country
 development, so it is unsatisfactory if experts are forced to serve somewhere else that differs from their own homeland. As long as the experts show their willingness to serve their
country
, it should be encouraged and supported.
On the other hand
, because of the differences between
countries
' faculties and training methods, there are
also
 several obstacles for white-collar workers to deal with a workplace environment that distinguishes with the training one.
However
, with the recent developing globalized systems, overcoming the cultural battery is not that tough someday. In conclusion, despite many
people
 saying the opposite, I think that it is necessary to allow professionals freely choose where they are willing to work. It is not only because of themselves but
also
 for the sustainable development of their
countries
.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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