The use of social media is replacing face to face interaction among many people in the society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is a prevalent issue that the proliferation of social networking sites
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taking place in
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numerous
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countries
worldwide.
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it has benefits,
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I believe its disadvantages
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advantages
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,in the sector of telecommunication social
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been a blessing for all of us who
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to communicate on
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and professional level.As in
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world ,
people
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are more prone to communicate through social hubs as an
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of
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other modes of
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,which is indeed a great feature of these
apps
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,as in a cheaper way ,within seconds
people
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can be communicated.These
apps
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have audiovisual
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calling features ,because of which
people
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hardly need to do direct
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,through skype and emo,indifferent of anywhere ,anyone can contact
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their kith-and -kins.
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,they are facilitating
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from direct
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as they are
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and sometimes costlier than that
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social
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websites.
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, these
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tools are jeopardizing our mental ability to increase connectivity ,due to which we are more
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.To illustrate,direct contact helps an individual to know
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someone
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some one
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someone
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in a far
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better way than that of artificial intelligence in
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everything is showy and mechanized .The reason why today psychological
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diseases
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diseases
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people
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are highly exposed
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these
communication
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mediums which is rather making them selfish and isolated.Rather
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socially active,it is snatching away their soft skills which would help them to shine
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time is equal to consuming 15
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cigarettes
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cigarettes
per day ,according to the U.S.A government ,which is really alarming .
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,
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the face-to-face
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connection
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should be given more priority. What is more alarming ,
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these connection
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are compromising
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our privacy .To interpret,whenever we call through websites ,we may be trapped by a
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party who could sell our valuable information to hackers.Due to
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,we can be socially
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as
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could leak our valuable information.A recent example could be ,
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renowned politician of Bangladesh
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socially boycotted as someone revealed his private
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conversation
converstaion
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conversation
with a renowned heroine ,which was embarrassing for him.
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prominent
apps
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can tarnish our reputation by breaking confidentiality. To
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conclude
,in terms of convenience ,social sites are
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for facial contact ,
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however
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it is increasing social distance and
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interfering
on
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our private life.
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advantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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