In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.

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These days, due to the advancement in technologies, machinery and awareness it has become really difficult for a senior secondary student to decide

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career in various fields. In some countries, teenagers are motivated to work or travel before starting university studies. In

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essay, both benefits and drawbacks will be discussed before my opinion is reached. For advantages, the

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benefit of working before the starting of undergraduate courses is to develop an interest in any particular course or stream, as it allows the young people to explore new skills and techniques.

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, I can work as a foreman and gain knowledge about the basics of Civil Engineering before commencing my coursework.

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help them in their resume where they can show

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as an internship or job experience. Even though the students will gain a clear vision for their future but it

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has some drawbacks.

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with, it can put them behind their classmates in the freshmen

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of university. To illustrate, when I will join the college as a rookie my friends have already completed their

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, if someone travels for a

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it will show as a gap

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on their resume.

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essay presented both pros and cons of the young people working on travelling before ending college, I think that its benefit including , a clear vision of the future and more opportunities in job outweighs its demerits

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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.

Your opinion

Some people argue that it is the government's responsibility to transport children to school while others believe that parents should do that. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world area now "one big traffic jam". how true do you think this statement is? what measures can governements take to discourage people from using their cars?

Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (Agree or Disagree)

Some people think that the modern communication technology is having a negative effect on a social relationship. To what extent do you agree or disagree?