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In the past, the main role of teachers was providing information. Today with various sources of information available to students, teachers have no role in modern education.  To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#role #teachers #information #sources #students #education
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ONE WIDELY HOLD OPINION IS THAT THE MAIN PURPOSE OF
TEACHERS
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’ EXISTENCE IS TO OFFER
INFORMATION
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.
STUDENTS
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 IN CURRENT SOCIETY CAN HAVE ACCESS TO AMOUNTS OF
INFORMATION
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, AS A CONSEQUENCE
TEACHERS
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 ARE NOT SIGNIFICANT AS BEFORE. I TOTALLY DISAGREE WITH
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 STATEMENT. THE INTERNET PROVIDES LEARNERS WITH ABUNDANT
INFORMATION
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 AND MAKES THE PROCESS OF OBTAINING INFO MORE EFFICIENT, CONVENIENT AND INTERESTING, AND IN
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 CAN BE SEEN AS UNNEEDED. TO AN EXTENT, WHEN A STUDENT WANTS TO KNOW THE HISTORY OF FRENCH, SHE CAN EASILY FIND VARIOUS SOURCES, WHICH RANGE FROM VIVID ILLUSTRATIONS TO PROFOUND ARTICLES.
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, ONLY WITH
TEACHERS
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 CAN SELECT THE MOST SUITABLE material, NO MATTER WHERE THE
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 COMES FROM AND EMPLOY DIFFERENT STRATEGIES SUITED TO THE PARTICULAR GROUP OF LEARNERS. APART FROM THE MOST OBVIOUS FUNCTION OF
TEACHERS
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 DISCUSSED ABOVE, THEY PLAY A KEY ROLE IN MORAL EDUCATION AND SOCIAL
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 LEARNING. THE COMPETITION IN ADULT LIFE IS SO FIERCE THAT ONLY EQUIPPING WITH ACADEMIC KNOWLEDGE IS NOT ADEQUATE. UNDER THE GUIDANCE OF
TEACHERS
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STUDENTS
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 CAN UNDERSTAND HOW TO BEHAVE PROPERLY AND BECOME PRODUCTIVE MEMBERS OF SOCIETY.
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, THE SAME IS TRUE FOR SOCIAL
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. IF A STUDENT IS RICH IN KNOWLEDGE BUT WEAK IN SOCIAL
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, THERE IS LITTLE POSSIBILITY FOR HIM TO BECOME A WELL-ADJUSTED ADULT. TO SUM UP,
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 THE ADVENT OF MODERN TECHNOLOGY BRINGS ABOUT AMPLE
INFORMATION
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 FOR
STUDENTS
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,
STUDENTS
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 REQUIRE MORE DIRECTION IN TERMS OF STANDARD OF UPRIGHT CONDUCT AND SOCIAL
SKILLS
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, SO THE ROLE OF TEACHER IS LESS LIKELY TO BE REPLACED.
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