Some people believe that professionals such as doctors and engineers should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some humanity
contemplate
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professional individuals who
called
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experts, should be in their
country
, and another platoon weens they should have
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to choose the clime that they like to stay
,
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and work. The
first
group adduces
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of
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their
country
invests a lot of money for education, and
others
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aspects of their life, they must stay in their
country
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and compensate
these
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expenses with their skills, and abilities,
although
another platoon
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this
idea. They believe professionals should be free in selecting the living, and working location.
In
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the one hand, I reckon we can focus on
this
topic from disparate aspects.
First
of all, when a
person
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abroad, after a short period of time, his
lingustics
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linguistics
linguistic
skills will be ameliorated;
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Chineese
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Chinese
people
who live in Iran after a short while
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can speak as well as native
persian
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.
Secondly
, Some nations are
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in some sciences, industries, etc. When an expert
person
in
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touch
them
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, the flow of information, cause
the
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knowledge of that
person
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improve
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. Not only does his skills enhance, but he
also
encounters different cultures;
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he learned about traditional
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for finding
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for
an
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special
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disease
dieseas
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disease
from Russians.
Thirdly
, in my point of view, if we wanted to have
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relationship between government and folk, we would give them selecting
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opportunities
oppotuinties
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opportunities
; allegorically, if
government
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the government
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forced their
people
stay
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in their
country
, and they do not have any right to
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, they would not work with sufficient efficiency, because they do not satisfied with these conditions. In my view holding
people
in
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circumstances, not only has not
any
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benefits, but
it
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also
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increases
increses
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increases
the
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gap
gaps
gaph
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gap
between government and
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its
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folk.
However
,
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group has another idea, they believe turning an ordinary
person
to
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an expert, imposes a lot of expenditure
to
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the administration, so the professionals must stay in their clime, and gratify these expenses; as I mentioned earlier,
this
kind of thinking only increase the
gaph
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gap
gaps
between mammon and professionals, and
also
it may cause hating experts from their
socities
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societies
. To sum up, I believe it is better mammon gives their professional the right of selecting the living and working place,
individualy
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individually
individuals
; in
this
way, they work more efficiently, and help
improving
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the science, from each side of the world, which has
pleasant
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effect on the life of other
people
around the globe; exactly the same as Ugur Sahin the CEO of Pfizer company.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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