Some people think news has no connection to peoples live so it is a waste of time to read news in newspaper and watch news programme in television .To what extend do you agree or disagree

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all over the world, we are hearing bad
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believe
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that information which cast
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no related to peoples
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and destroyed our valuable
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news
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and ignore
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irrelevant
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hand, we waste our
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as following information no connection to us
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of following positive and
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book
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which can enhance our knowledge and ability in work.
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was keen to follow all the
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related to
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the internet but
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had to been studied my lesson so
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unfortunately
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unfortunately
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couldn't pass my exam.in sum, we shouldn't allow
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our
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news
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, bad
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can impact
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our
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.
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, all over the earth we can observe
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happening. We have been passed illness years and
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war
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happened
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between
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Ukraine
and Russa which both
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the
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numeros
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numerous
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it impacted
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increasing the number of
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during these years.So we have to avoid
follow
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the yellow
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contrary
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, some people believe we have to know about events
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surrounded
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around
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prevent bad happening in future In conclusion, the bad
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which has no connection to us can waste our
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the
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depression
individual. I want to restate on opinion and take
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advice to abandon bad
news
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