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Many people think that mobile phones should be banned in public places such as libraries, shops, and public transport. Do you agree or disagree

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Introduction
It is undeniable that mobile phones are being intensively used in every kind of place, particularly public places
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 as groceries, malls, libraries, and general transportation. While there is a large number of
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 tend to think that they should be prohibited in these places because of several reasons, I am of the opposite opinion as I believe that gadgets are nowadays indispensable and we can not survive happily without them.
Body · 1
The reasons for my belief are quite simple and easy to be fully understood.
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, these gadgets help
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 a lot by a very interesting feature which is
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-consuming. Even though it might often be understood as a negative point or a drawback of utilizing them, it really helps a lot.
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, if a traveller is sitting in the airport waiting for their plane, a mobile phone can waste their
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, and goes
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 quickly.
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, they might be a so wanted device when they are very bored.
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Moreover
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, as a
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 reason, in many cases, if a person is stuck in a certain place, and can not even yell for help, a mobile phone can be a solution for
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 trouble since they can call for the police. I mean that if they did not have their own one, they might not survive for a long
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.
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, any gadget can be used either for a positive purpose or a necessary use
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 of a negative one.
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, all members of society have to consider
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 stuff a priority
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 several occasions.
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, the government consume a long
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 how to regulate
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's lives including their use of them.
Conclusion
In conclusion, from my perspective, I believe that the advantages of utilizing them are far greater than their drawbacks, as they could be used for lots of beneficial purposes. As a forecast, I suppose that
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 will try to utilize them much more intensively in the foreseeable future than now.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distraction
  • Etiquette
  • Tranquility
  • Prohibit
  • Intrusive
  • Courtesy
  • Essential communication
  • Public decorum
  • Designated areas
  • Safety concerns
  • Noise pollution
  • Digital etiquette
  • Enforcement measures
  • Civic responsibility
  • Silent mode
  • Connectivity
  • Invasiveness
  • Social norms
  • Policy implementation
  • Moderation
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