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Nowadays more and more people consume fast food on a regular basis. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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It is noticeable in recent years most people tend to eat fast
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 outside their homes
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 of home-made
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, I believe,
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 is a bad habit and negative development for many reasons
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 as health, and cost issues,
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 has become a type of culture that we practice in our lives among the different ages of a majority of people, we cannot deny the delicious taste of fast
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 we should be moderate in consuming
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 to save our money; because buying fast
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 is more expensive than home-made
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,
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, readymade
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 is gaining popularity among the vast amount of people because of the saving specious time which consumed in prepare home-made
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.
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, ready-to-eat
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 has low nutrition values, harmful freeze ingredients, and preservatives which means the readymade
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 includes a lot of carcinogenic properties, unhealthy fats, and harmful oil,
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, medics around the world recommend avoiding eating all types of fast
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 as much as we can, because of health consequences
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 as diabetes, and obesity,
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,
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 kind of
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 causes the addictive which means if you try once you cannot stop trying it more and more. In conclusion, despite, readymade
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 has become one of the most popular cultures, in my opinion, eating junk
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 is still considered negative development since it causes various health problems, and wastes our money, maybe we can try fast
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 once in a while, but the high consumption should be avoided at all costs.
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