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Fast food is becoming one part of life everywhere; this has bad effects on our lifestyles and diet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that fast
foold
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food
 is becoming more and more popular in our lives all over the world.
This
 trend has negative impacts on our lifestyles and diet. I mostly agree with
this
 opinion, but I believe that
people
 may sometimes have
fastfood
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fast food
. There are some reasons that fast
food
 may have bad effects on our lives.
First
, fast
food
tend
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 to have high calories and
lack
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of
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nutrition
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nutritions
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nutrition
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.
For example
, most fast foods
such
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hamburgers
hambergers
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as hambergers
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,
potates
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potatoes
rotates
, and shakes use too
much
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 oils, salt, sugars, and carbohydrate.
In addition
,
people
 are easily addicted to fast
food
 as these meals are convenient, cheap, and delicious.
Thus
,
people
 would get weight if they have too much of
the
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meals.
Second
,
people
 may find it difficult to feel sensitive tastes once they get used to the fast
food
 habit. As we have more oily, salty, and
sugarly
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sugary
sugar
 fast
food
,
people
 would need stronger stimulation.
Therefore
, it would be hard to feel gentle tastes.
On the other hand
, there are some positive aspects
for
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 fast
food
. It is convenient and
time
-efficient.
For instance
, mothers can save cooking
time
 when they are busy with their work and child care. When office workers do not
enough
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time
 for their lunch, they can have it in a limited
time
. In
this
 regard, fast
food
 can be effective when it is combined properly in our lives. In conclusion, I mostly agree with the opinion that fast
food
have
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 more negative effects
in
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on
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 our lifestyles and diet.
However
,
people
 can utilize
the
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fast
food
 when necessary as it can help them to save
their
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time
.
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