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Fast food is becoming one part of life everywhere; this has bad effects on our lifestyles and diet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that fast
foold
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food
 is becoming more and more popular in our lives all over the world.
This
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 trend has negative impacts on our lifestyles and diet. I mostly agree with
this
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 opinion, but I believe that
people
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 may sometimes have
fastfood
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fast food
. There are some reasons that fast
food
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 may have bad effects on our lives.
First
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, fast
food
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tend
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 to have high calories and
lack
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of
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apply
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nutrition
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nutritions
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nutrition
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.
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, most fast foods
such
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hamburgers
hambergers
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as hambergers
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,
potates
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potatoes
rotates
, and shakes use too
much
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 oils, salt, sugars, and carbohydrate.
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,
people
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 are easily addicted to fast
food
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 as these meals are convenient, cheap, and delicious.
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,
people
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 would get weight if they have too much of
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meals.
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,
people
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 may find it difficult to feel sensitive tastes once they get used to the fast
food
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 habit. As we have more oily, salty, and
sugarly
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sugary
sugar
 fast
food
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,
people
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 would need stronger stimulation.
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, it would be hard to feel gentle tastes.
On the other hand
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, there are some positive aspects
for
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 fast
food
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. It is convenient and
time
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-efficient.
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, mothers can save cooking
time
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 when they are busy with their work and child care. When office workers do not
enough
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time
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 for their lunch, they can have it in a limited
time
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. In
this
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 regard, fast
food
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 can be effective when it is combined properly in our lives. In conclusion, I mostly agree with the opinion that fast
food
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have
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 more negative effects
in
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on
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 our lifestyles and diet.
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,
people
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 can utilize
the
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apply
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fast
food
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 when necessary as it can help them to save
their
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apply
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time
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart diseases
  • nutritional deficiency
  • malnutrition
  • convenience
  • nutritional value
  • busy lifestyles
  • balanced meals
  • economic impact
  • lower-income groups
  • healthier alternatives
  • cultural heritage
  • culinary diversity
  • mass production
  • environmental degradation
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