Some people want governments to spend money looking for life on other planets. Others, however, think this is a waste of public money when there are so many problems on earth. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays,
due to
improvements in science, people
have higher expectations from their governments. One of these expectations is the search for life on other planets
. However
, some people
believe that this
is just a waste of public money and there are multiple problems
that we should focus on, instead
of this
. In this
essay, I will discuss both sides and will draw my personal conclusion.
There are a variety of reasons that may lead people
to need to find other planets
for life on. One of the major causes can be pollution due to
the increase in the number of manufacturers. To illustrate, the huge quantity of carbon emissions from manufacturers has increased more and more over the years and people
can not endure the carbon emissions because of their impact on health. For example
, the diseases caused by these emissions threaten our lives and our environment. In addition
to, the war and racism among the population it’s
a phenomenon that has been for a long time and it’s continues
until nowadays. It occurs for multiple reasons including skin colour, nationality, or family background. Change the verb form
it continues
However
, I think it’s
happened because of the lack of knowledge and education.
According to
the other opinion, it’s
true that is
a waste of public funds because problems
and challenges happen everywhere and we must learn how to solve them instead
of running away to other planets
. So even if we find another planet to live on of course we will face several problems
and we can not run again to new planets
. Therefore
, we should know how we deal with our problems
and solve them to save our planet.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that we don’t need to find other planets
. We can make Earth safer and better if we improve it and find safe alternatives to things that harm our planet.Submitted by t.albadaei.ta on
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task achievement
You have addressed both sides of the argument and presented your own opinion, which is good. However, your points could be developed further with more specific examples and details to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, but some parts lack clear connections between ideas. Try to use more linking words and phrases to make the flow of your writing smoother.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which effectively frame your argument.
task achievement
You have made an effort to discuss both sides of the issue, showing an understanding of the task requirements.