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In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in other cases, people choose their own marriage partners. Discuss both systems and state which you think is better.

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In several
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, people have
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outlook
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 marriage. For others, marriage
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 determined by their parents, while, some can choose their own husband or wife to marry.
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.
Arranged
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 union is sometimes
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necessary, for those royalty bloodlines that might
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 out. Marriage is
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 company in order to
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 their business, that will lead
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 two
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 Sometimes having a destined partner,
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will save you time in finding someone to marry.
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, the disadvantage of it is there might be a chance that no love between two
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 or they already fell with someone else before meeting their chosen partner. They will be married in paper and in name only
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 the other hand, letting you choose of
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the partner
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 of your own free will, an understanding and love will be present in both parties. They will be strong due to
hardships
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 they faced throughout the years of being together. In my opinion, making you choose
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who
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 you want to marry is better. Marrying someone of your own
chossing
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choosing
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 means that you already know that person's attitude,
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 and who they are as an individual.
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, he/she will be there with you through hardships and stand firm until you grow old together.
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