In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in other cases, people choose their own marriage partners. Discuss both systems and state which you think is better.

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marriage. For others, marriage

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determined by their parents, while, some can choose their own husband or wife to marry.

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necessary, for those royalty bloodlines that might

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out. Marriage is

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will save you time in finding someone to marry.

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or they already fell with someone else before meeting their chosen partner. They will be married in paper and in name only

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the other hand, letting you choose of

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of your own free will, an understanding and love will be present in both parties. They will be strong due to

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they faced throughout the years of being together. In my opinion, making you choose

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you want to marry is better. Marrying someone of your own

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means that you already know that person's attitude,

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and who they are as an individual.

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, he/she will be there with you through hardships and stand firm until you grow old together.

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In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in other cases, people choose their own marriage partners. Discuss both systems and state which you think is better.

Fully explain your ideas

Do you think consumers should avoid over packed products or is it the responsibility of the producers to avoid extra packaging of goods?

People's shopping habits depend more on the age group they belong to than on other factors. To what extent you agree or disagree?

In the fight against crime, police forces and government are increasingly using security cameras in public places. Some people are opposed to this, saying that it invades our privacy. What do you think?

A lot of people spend a major part of their adult life at work, so job satisfaction is very important for individual happiness. What are the main factors that contribute to job satisfaction? What are the possible solutions for people who are unsatisfied with their jobs?