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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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In general, developing countries tend to have more young people than the old, which is usually regarded as a preferable situation for the economy. In fact, India where its population is dramatically increasing with a high rate of young nations is experiencing an enormous economical rise.
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, some experts in non-governmental organisations often argue that the too high birth rate in a
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 causes many serious
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. In the following paragraphs, I would like to discuss the positive and negative sides of being a young
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. On one hand, a young nation has to handle so many social
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 that it might not have enough time and money to maintain public services at a high level.
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, a large number of people in southern African countries are suffering from well-known diseases for the poor national health services. In
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, social
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 are tackled in the order of prioritisation and
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 of the majority, young people
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 can be overlooked.
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, compared to an ageing society like Japan and the USA, a
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 full of youth can make a remarkable economical flourish. More and more entrepreneurs start their new businesses in
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 countries as China and India, seeking its low salary and rich labour force. Young workers may welcome automation and digitalisation, which encourages innovation. From these points I mentioned above, I would strongly insist that a younger society is more advantageous than disadvantageous. Nations with a large youth population have a considerable potential to be a major economic power. It may be true that public services are not good enough for everyone in a developing
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, but economic development can cover that in time.
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