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In the future, all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think te advantages of driverless vechicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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The development in the field of technology like artificial intelligence and machine learning has brought in many advancements in
automobile
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 industry.
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, one
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vehicles
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 which was a distant dream a few decades ago
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 become a reality now .
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 there are pros and cons
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 discovery, I strongly believe that the advantages of
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 outweigh its disadvantages.
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 like trucks,cars and flights fundamentally depend on machine learning and other advanced technologies.
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, machines can sometimes malfunction which may lead to disastrous results on
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. To illustrate, Tesla is a path breaker in producing autonomous
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, during their initial rollout phase, there were numerous accidents reported , sometimes the death of passengers.
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, if all these
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 become driverless thousands of drivers
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who make their living in
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 profession can lose jobs when technology takes over,
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 can
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 a detrimental effect on the community.
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, in
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 era of modernization ,time is an important asset. Driverless
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 can save many from tiring driving experiences,
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especially
 in metros
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 as Mumbai and Banglore where the traffic congestion is dreadful which leaves a negative impact both physically and mentally
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 more accidents
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 to happen.
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 technologies,
human related
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 errors and work
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 limits can be minimized.
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, there are government regulations that only allow a driver to drive
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 more than 8 hrs,
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 rule has caused
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a delay
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delay
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 in logistics ,
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and supply
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chain
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 and affects the economy. With the
driveless
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driverless
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vehicles
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 these issues can be addressed.
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, we can save fuel
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 as the crude oil prices are extremely high and
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 improvement in air quality .
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 downsides like high insurance
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,technical issues,privacy concerns,unemployment and maintenance
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. I firmly believe that
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 of
these technology
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 outweigh the drawbacks.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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