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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is positive or negative development?

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I think it is beneficial that goods
such
 as food, clothing, cars and furniture which are produced in certain
parts
 of the
world
 are available in other
parts
 of the globe too which is leading to an increasing similarity in
countries
.
People
 have now access to commodities which they could not use before. There are some articles which are produced in certain
parts
 of the
world
 owning to the geographical factors
as a result
 of which they cannot be accessed by individuals living in other
parts
 of the
world
.
For example
, fruits
such
 as banana and pineapple are grown in tropical regions, which when exported to colder
countries
such
 as Canada and Russia makes it feasible to experience the taste of these fruits inhabitants living there.
Furthermore
,
people
 can migrate to different
countries
 with less fear of becoming homesick as nowadays almost every product from around the globe is available.
For instance
, earlier Indian immigrants were not able to make a range of Indian dishes due to the non-availability of some specific Indian spices and vegetables.
However
 since now different products are exported and imported among all the
countries
,
people
 do not miss the significant part of their cultural heritage
,
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 and can live and work more productively. Some may argue that the global spread of similar merchandise and increasing similarity among
countries
 would reduce
people
's motivation to travel to different
parts
 of the
world
, decreasing tourism and its revenue to the
countries
. But
i
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 think
people
 will still travel to experience the natural features of different places
such
 as mountains, forests, and wildlife. In conclusion,
although
 the increasing spread of similar goods is leading to growing similarity among
countries
, I believe that it is a desirable development as
people
 from different
parts
 of the
world
 could have an access to all the products, even the ones which are not produced or grown in their
countries
 making them feel satisfied and immigrants less homesick.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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