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Write a letter to a friend inviting them to go on vacation with you. Include Why you want to go on holiday Where you want to go Why you want them to come with you

#friend #vacation #holiday
Hello John, I hope you and your family members are doing good during
this
 pandemic situation. I am planning for a trip to Dubai with you
in
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next
 week to enjoy my vacation. As
you
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 aware of my office environment and busy schedule on task completion for my customer.
Last
 week, I was sick and hospitalized near
to
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my house and
doctor
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the doctor
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 analyzed the primary cause
for
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 sickness was
the
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mental depression. The doctor strictly informed me to take a break from my work for a couple of weeks. I took
this
 situation to my manager, and he approved my holiday plan. I have a plan to go to Dubai because of its peaceful environment and many adventurous activities to come out of
stress
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level
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. As well as I read an article about the future of
museum
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 inaugurated in Dubai a month before which is recently added
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 my vacation plan list. As I know you very well from my childhood and trustable person in my life. I would like to schedule my trip with you. It will help me
out
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to come out of my depression. Keep me
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 about your schedule so that I will book the tickets and accommodation for our trip. Take Care, Bishu
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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