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Some people say that children should go to school as young as possible, while others believe that children should not start primary school until they are six or seven-years-old. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Education
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 plays a crucial role in the development of
children
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 in many ways. Some people believe that
children
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 ought to attend
school
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 as much as earlier, whereas opponents support that
school
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 life should be started at around six or seven
years
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 old for the sake of the
children
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. Even though either of them
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 advantages and disadvantages, the former seems to me more reasonable. The reasons will elucidate in
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 essay respectively. On the one hand, nursery
school
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 curriculums are developed based on an exact approach which cares about
children
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's biological ages and capabilities. Clearly,
children
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 have more opportunities to improve their manual dexterities, communication, and soft skills through playing and making activities in
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 schools. Montessori would be a good example of
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, according to
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 method
children
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 take
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 for their daily needs like cleaning, and cooking which
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 highly significant for holistic development.
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, in the modern
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 many
children
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 do not have a sibling,and a social environment
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 provided in the
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 may eliminate
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 loneliness as well.
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,
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more
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 in
school
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 bring more benefits in the long run.
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, the
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 six
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 of life are deemed
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significant for establishing firm family bonds.
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 to say, a sense of trust is built over
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 period between
parents
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 and
children
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. If
children
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 spend less time with their
parents
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 it probably leads to a detrimental effect on
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 emotional development of
children
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.
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 to
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,
children
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 who attend
school
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 at earlier ages compared to peers are likely to discourage in the future because of their long
education
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.
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, those
parents
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 who have a busier work routine do not allocate adequate time to their
children
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 and
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also
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 causes the same problem.
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, If
parents
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 do not enrol their
children
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 at
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, they should provide for them a parental
education
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 at home. In conclusion, there is a dilemma whether
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 should go to
school
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 till six
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 old or not.
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 both factors have their own benefits and drawbacks, I believe that receiving a proper
education
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 as much as earlier presents more advantages for
children
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.

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