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The issue of gay marriage remains controversial. Some people think that this trend has adverse effects on the society while others believe that it is seen as a natural trend and right for people to choose this type of marriage. Should gay marriage be legal? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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society
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society
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 that gay
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 impact on the social environment.These
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society
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gay
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 becoming popular they got
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relationships
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 with someone who likes them or with the help of
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 they find someone who
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 to become their life partner.As it is seen that with the help of money they can do anything they want.
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 that it is a natural trend and each people have to choose their life on their
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 wish when they turned to 18 years.No one
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 on them while
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 is having different thinking and
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different
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.Some individuals like
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types
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marriages
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society
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 has a right to choose a life partner of
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. In conclusion,
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opinions of people are there in
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society
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if
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 gave permission for an activity that means it is not
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 ill-legal activity.In my opinion,these
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are
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natural
natual
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natural
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does
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 not cause any harm to
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society
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 must treat everyone in
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 way.

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