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In the future, nobody will by printed newspapers or blooks because tehy will be able to read everything tehy want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or diagree with this statement ?

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Our
society
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 is significantly influenced by the impact of digitalism. It became a fixed part
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 our daily dealings as it is not only helpful in personal life but
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 very useful in manners of education and government. It is as well very beneficial in sectors that are involved with mass communication, entertainment and
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information
 spread just as
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newspapers
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news papers
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newspapers
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 and
books
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. These printed pages are
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 to be
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replaced
 by digital
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 without demanding additional costs. I am
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 opponent of
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 essay I will examine my opinion with examples. One major point why I believe that at some point in the future
books
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 and newspapers will be replaced by digital
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 is
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 because digital
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 are more convenient and less expensive to produce. While producing a book involves plenty of steps from sourcing the paper and the ink
over printing
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 it
and
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to binding it by hand, a digital book just
need
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 one simple step: the upload into a digital portal.
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, all the money which is nowadays invested in manufacturing
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newspapers
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/
books
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 could
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 be invested in important governmental
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improvement sectors
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such
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 as
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green energy transportation or education. Another reason
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 approve is the fact, that most
books
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 are sooner or later ending up in the wastebin anyways. Either because they are too old or because they have lost their value
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society
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. Digital
books
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 and magazines prevent the huge amount of paper waste which is created by
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books
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 and magazines made
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 paper. Digital
books
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 and Newspapers are not only more convenient for
society
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 but
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 for our planet.
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, some
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people
peopel
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people
 argue, that
books
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 and
newspaper
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too
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 traditional and rooted within
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 as there have a chance to
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disappear
dissapear
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disappear
 completely. To sum up, I am of the opinion, that newspapers and
books
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 will be
repalced
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replaced
 by digital
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 due that they are easier to produce and better for our planet.
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