People should follow the local customs and traditions when they come to live in a new country.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that nowadays
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made
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more easier.
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result
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many
people
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prefer to live in a
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which can provide them
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better lifestyle .Some
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hold the opinion that when a foreigner chooses to live in a new
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,he should follow the customs and traditions of the
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where he resides .As far as I am concerned, I agree that by following a nation's customs and traditions
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can acquire a better life
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there.
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of all, the traditional aspects of a
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the potential to unite the
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. Traditional festivals Bring
people
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together and make a strong bond between them.Eventually, each and every person start to care for
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and
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. To
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,celebrations like Diwali and Holi make
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in India gather together and share their happiness with each other,despite
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thinking that they live in a diverse
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.
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, if a foreigner respects and celebrates
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this festivals
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would get a huge acceptance among the Indians.
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,when a new person
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to know a
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's traditional customs and laws,it
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the
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life
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quiet
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easier there. If an individual
unaware
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is unaware
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about
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the residing
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's regulations, he may tend to make mistakes quite often. As a consequence, they might end up in prison or paying
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a penalty
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penalty
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.
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, many
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from India have got lifetime imprisonment in Gulf countries as they act differently without knowing
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country
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's regulations. Unfortunately, most of them were innocent
people
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. To conclude, I totally agree with the fact that a new person must be
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about the
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he lives in .
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he can be welcomed by
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society and can have a comfortable life
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there

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