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Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In recent years, custodial sentences have been a topic of debate. A school of thought holds that imprisoning
criminals
 for a significantly long period is the best way to curb criminal activities in society, while others recommend resorting to other effective solutions. In
this
 essay, I am going to clarify the status quo, before giving my perspectives.  There are several reasons why I believe that putting convicts behind the bars for a long time is not the only type of punishment.
Instead
 of sending those with a light
crime
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crimes
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such
 as robbery, burglary and Counterfeit in jail for a long time, juvenile and minor offenders can be punished through fines, social
works
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 and other non-custodial means.
Firstly
,
criminals
 do not have anything to work during their jail term, they will not be beneficial
for
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 society after being released.
Secondly
, the atmosphere of prison makes offenders feel more depressed, and
hence
 it could possibly take a heavy toll on their mental health, leading to negative consequences in their lives.
Finally
, by keeping these small-scale
criminals
, we can try to rehabilitate them,
for example
 through training or education programmes,
law breakers
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 for finding jobs in the future. In my opinion, how an individual ought to be punished depends on the nature and motive of the crime committed. There should be prolonged confinements for heinous crimes like murder and
rapes
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rape
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 as the offenders of
such
 crimes have bad motives against human life which need to be dealt
strictly
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.  In conclusion, from my point of view, enforcing Strict laws,
such
 as separating
criminals
 and keeping them in cells longer, is most unlikely and should be provisioned by police policymakers.
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  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
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