Some people think that children should be homeschooled when they are very young while others think it is better for them to attend a kindergarten. Which do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Learning from family , which is
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essential for
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every child
, might be not helpful to connecting with individuals;
however
, it has long been an issue of debate whether little
one
should be
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by parents or pre-school should be
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option for them.
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my personal opinion. On the
one
hand, there are several reasons that support
this
idea, perhaps the prominent
one
is, “better atmosphere”. To put it simply, young
one
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get
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environment and expert tutors, when they get admission
in
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nursery
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the nursery
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.
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, they get
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the opportunity
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to make new friends at the same age.
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, in
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all
parent
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parents
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prefer to
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pre school
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for
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their child
,
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since it
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helpful
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in
numerous
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way
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.
Therefore
, nursery school would be beneficial in order to give
youngster
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proper
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environment for education.
On the other hand
, despite having
great
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environment at pre-school, gaining knowledge from parents, which taught beyond the book knowledge. To elaborate
it
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, if
child
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children
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learn
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from
the
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smaller age from their
parent
or grandparents, they can get
chance
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to learn
plethora
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of
thing
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things
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beyond the book
such
as self-discipline and other life lessons that their
parent
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parents
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experience in their entire life. India could be an ideal example here,
majority
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of Indian
juvenile
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mature early as
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to the other
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youth, because
their
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get training from their
parent
from a very small age. The more the young learn from family, the more mature they will become. To conclude,
although
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can provide
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atmosphere to the child, in my
opinion
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it will
will
itwill
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it will
be more beneficial, if children will be trained under the
parents
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guidance.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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