Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. Others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are bet or that they find the most interesting. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, it is a debatable
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for some people to say that teenagers should focus on all
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whilst some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on
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they are most interested in.
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I would say that
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. On one hand,
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on
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subjects
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to enhance more proficiency in the field.
Consequently
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the ladder of success
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means that less
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of stress will reduce from other courses found to be irrelevant.
On the other hand
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on all
subjects
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more opportunities out there.
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rate of competition , most companies
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to
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people with multiple talents because they are seen as
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of all trades. Again, a student who is
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in English and Mathematics
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a better option in selecting either of the two when it comes to job employment at
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level. Moreso, their knowledge
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in several horizons. In conclusion ,
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on
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limited knowledge
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certain things , whilst the opposite of them have
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a better
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advantage in life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • well-rounded knowledge base
  • cognitive flexibility
  • adaptability
  • creativity
  • multidisciplinary
  • career prospects
  • informed
  • versatile
  • motivation
  • engagement
  • achievement
  • specialization
  • in-depth expertise
  • emotional and psychological well-being
  • satisfaction
  • burnout
  • personal and professional fulfillment
  • tailor
  • individual needs
  • broad curriculum
  • compromise
  • diverse range
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