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Some people think that increasing communication usage of computers and mobile phones by young people has had a negative effect on their reading and writing skills.to what extent do you agree or disagree

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Few masses ponder that communication techniques
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 like electronic gadgets by nation youth will have
daunting
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 effect on their learning and writing materials.It would
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Secondly
,it
have
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 hazardous health issues.I will agree with the notion and I will share my views in the upcoming fragments. To commence with,in
modern
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 era
use
 of electronic applications would dramatically increase due to the modern
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life style
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 and most
of
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the generation
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generation
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 would like to
use
 them.To elaborate it,when the youngsters
use
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mobile and computers
like
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 gadgets
then
 they do not have extra time to spend on them so they
use
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, the latest data by the Wilson harry,who is
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 of technology share that less than 85% of
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the nation
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nation
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 youth
use
 short abbreviation like thnx,
bcoz
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 during the time of chat and they have many word mistakes.Which will decrease their language proficiencies.
Thus
,
upcoming
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 ability to learn and write would not be neglected.
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, the gadget era totally
depend
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 on the latest
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 like cell phone and electronic machines and they have very bad consequences on their
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lifestyle
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life style
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.To explicate it,when the
use
 the upcoming appliances the rays and light
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 by them have
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 dangerous influence on human beings because they totally depend upon them.
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,as per the
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”American Eyes and Heart
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” 89% of young people have low eyesight and coronary
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 diseases.
Thus
,they should
be
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use
in
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systematically because “health is wealth”. To conclude
this
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 the phone and computers should be avoided.Yet they will
use
 only in that conditions
,
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when they
very
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 urgent.
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