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Some people say that overeating is harmful and advertising for some food products should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, some people in the community think that overeating foods can harm and damage their
health
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 and over-advertising
food
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products
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 should be prohibited as well. In
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 essay, I will provide my perspective to show that I agree or disagree with
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 idea. Overeating foodstuff can
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 detriment to consumers'
health
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 because it may produce some dangerous acid to digest
food
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 after eating so much.
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, overeating
food
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 can make consumers ill and obese.
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, if children eat so much foodstuff and sweets, they mostly have a tendency to have a pot belly.
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, they usually get diagnosed that they develop diabetes and other diseases.
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, eating so much foodstuff and sweets can jeopardize their
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 and
cause
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 other troubles to them in treating their body to become healthy.
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, over-promoting their
products
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 by using social media or other ways to entice their customers to purchase it should be forbidden because they will easily get attracted to purchase those
products
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 and most customers think that those goods will not
cause
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 any harm to their bodies.
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, consumers decide to choose their goods by only watching social influencers on social platforms and do not think very meticulously and judiciously when purchasing them.
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, those goods may damage their body. In conclusion, I strongly agree with
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 notion that overeating and over-promoting
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products
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 should be prohibited in the community because both options
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 severe issues and a variety of dangers not only to customers'
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 but
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 to advertisements in the
food
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 business.
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