As mass communication and transport continue to grow, societies are becoming more and more alike leading to a phenomenon known as globalization. Some people fear that globalization will inevitably lead to the total loss of cultural identity. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, globalization occurs almost everywhere across the world: developed communication and transport resources allow to exchange
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and cultural knowledge. Numerical
people
think
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trend is
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treating
threatening
creating
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the cultural
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identity
of nations and countries, while I don't support these views mostly due to wide, robust, and
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ineliminable
cultural background of different nations and
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strongly
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biases about other cultures.
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, there
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a lot of different
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of cultural
identity
that can not be lost by globalization. We grow up with our family, friends, traditions, celebrations, languages, and story - these are all things that
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us. In
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you read mostly our country writers' books
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your own language, discuss
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of your country,
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national events. A feeling of
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attraction to these ideas, being, places,
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let you identify yourself,
for example
, as an object or a subject of society.
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, there always be a
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plenty
of ways to understand and accept
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the cultural
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identity
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a specific group of
people
.
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, our
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prejudices
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toward
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other communities help them to
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their cultural
identity
. While we grow, we learn some basic principles, values, and facts about cultures and societies.
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, we become biased and
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aware
awarded
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aware
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their advantages and disadvantages in comparison with
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. I might help not only to find themselves by understanding
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or
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views and opinions to cultures and find
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or
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own but
also
to give societies abilities not to lose their autonomy. Irish
people
mostly don't like English,
for instance
, so
this
aspect could be one of many a way to identify yourself as
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Irish
,
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but
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not. In conclusion,
prejudities
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prejudices
prejudice
and our own culture could not be eliminated or substituted, because we accept them through the school.
Therefore
, while we grow, we are able to ensure
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about
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our cultural
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and we can prevent the total loss of it.
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