Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

Entertainment is one of the crucial factors in human life. When we talk about entertainment,
art
plays an essential role.
Therefore
most of the
government
allocates some
budget
for
arts
. But some argue that
this
budget
allocation does not make sense. In
this
essay, I explore
that
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allocating a
budget
is worthy as well as I explain my opinion regarding
this
statement.
Firstly
, I will show the role of
art
,
why
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and why
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art
is so important in human life and
secondly
I will demonstrate why the above statement is not
a
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valid statement. Actually,
art
is a representation of someone's idea. It will be a direct message or indirect message to
the
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society
. Most of the time, artists are using
this
medium to give a good idea to
society
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the society
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. By observing those
arts
, the civilians think something from a different angle.
This
will improve the thinking ability of the
people
.
People
with different ideas, change the world.
Furthermore
, tourism will increase due to
art
because
art
is a major pillar of the culture of a
country
. Many tourists visit those countries to entertain those
arts
. As an example, In
Srilanka
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there is a place called Sigiriya, which was developed by king Kasyapa. In that place, there are lots of ancient wall
arts
available. Millions of tourists come to Srilanka to enjoy those
arts
.
Therefore
art
plays an essential role in Srilankan tourism.
However
, some
people
, especially younger
people
, believe that
art
is not very important. They criticize the
government
that rather than allocating a
budget
to
art
, it is better to allocate that
budget
to something else. But the above paragraph clearly shows the benefits of the
art
.
People
without
art
are not sensitive to
people
's emotions. They can’t survive in
society
.
Government
is the representative of
the
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society
.
Government
decisions have a high impact on
people
’s lives. If the
government
doesn’t allocate the
budget
to
art
,
this
may cause many social problems
as well as
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, as well as this decision,
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this
decision will have a high impact on the economy of the
country
.
In
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sums
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up,
art
is a very important factor
of
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the development of
the
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country
,
moreover
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it is a major pillar of
civilization
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the civilization
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of a
country
. In my opinion, allocating more
budget
to
art
will be a good thing for that
country
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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