Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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Entertainment is one of the crucial factors in human life. When we talk about entertainment,
art
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plays an essential role.
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most of the
government
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allocates some
budget
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for
arts
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. But some argue that
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budget
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allocation does not make sense. In
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allocating a
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is worthy as well as I explain my opinion regarding
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, I will show the role of
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,
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and why
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art
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is so important in human life and
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I will demonstrate why the above statement is not
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valid statement. Actually,
art
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is a representation of someone's idea. It will be a direct message or indirect message to
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society
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. Most of the time, artists are using
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medium to give a good idea to
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society
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. By observing those
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, the civilians think something from a different angle.
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will improve the thinking ability of the
people
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.
People
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with different ideas, change the world.
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, tourism will increase due to
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because
art
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is a major pillar of the culture of a
country
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. Many tourists visit those countries to entertain those
arts
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. As an example, In
Srilanka
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there is a place called Sigiriya, which was developed by king Kasyapa. In that place, there are lots of ancient wall
arts
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available. Millions of tourists come to Srilanka to enjoy those
arts
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.
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art
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plays an essential role in Srilankan tourism.
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, some
people
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, especially younger
people
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, believe that
art
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is not very important. They criticize the
government
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that rather than allocating a
budget
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to
art
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, it is better to allocate that
budget
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to something else. But the above paragraph clearly shows the benefits of the
art
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.
People
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without
art
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are not sensitive to
people
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's emotions. They can’t survive in
society
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.
Government
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is the representative of
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society
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.
Government
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decisions have a high impact on
people
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’s lives. If the
government
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doesn’t allocate the
budget
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to
art
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,
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may cause many social problems
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, as well as this decision,
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this
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decision will have a high impact on the economy of the
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.
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sums
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up,
art
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is a very important factor
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the development of
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country
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,
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moreover
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it is a major pillar of
civilization
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the civilization
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of a
country
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. In my opinion, allocating more
budget
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to
art
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will be a good thing for that
country
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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