Some people believe that children’s time outside of school should be filled with scheduled activities such as art and music classes and sports. Others feel that children need free time to play and relax. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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skills
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and might
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whether
wether
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whether
such
as sport, art and music classes or they need spare time
to relax and play. I, however
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game, if they try Change the noun form
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this
activity
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encourage
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encourage
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skills
in order to learn something new. Moreover
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they have different Correct article usage
the same
skill
and by involving Fix the agreement mistake
skills
this
activity
they get to know their expertise.
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youngsters
have
more free Change the verb form
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time
, they enjoy their childhood which is precious time
for every human beings
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