Some hold the view that ideas and information should be completely open, and there should be no control on what people can read and watch in the media (TV, newspaper, Internet) Do you agree with this view, or do you think that in some circumstances governments should limit the freedom of the media?

These days, accessing the data and news become much easier because of the mass
media
. Mass
media
such
as Television, newspaper and the Internet are accessible from almost every part of the world. Many
people
believe that some restriction in accessing information is needed, whereas others argued that
media
freedom is an essential factor for democracy. In
this
essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument and I will express my opinion that why I do not think the government’s censorship is acceptable. Some
people
claim that broadcast and
media
should be controlled and banned in some cases. It is their view that government is responsible for some violent and
fraud
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sites and channels. So, by curbing
this
content threats will be diminished.
Moreover
, some countries' governments prefer to censor some social
media
and news channels which narrate opposed ideas.
For instance
, in North Korea due to the propagation of their false beliefs, there is no live-stream foreign program on national TV. A growing number of
people
believe that governments
have
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not the right to control
media
. Because being able to access all information is one of the main factors of democracy and freedom in a society.
That is
to say, among lots of channels to flicks and web pages to surf
people
can choose their favourite ones intellectually.
Although
free
media
is substantial for a community, parents should be able to restrict some inappropriate and illegal subjects for their immature children to decrease the risk of
media
on their family. In conclusion,
media
is a kind of double-edged sword that can be used in a positive and negative way. It can be controlled by governments due to political and security purposes,
also
it can be freely accessible to respect human rights. Personally, I think in the modern era clarity highly matters and free
media
is one of the major aspects of achieving clarification and
a
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democratic society.
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