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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it

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Advertising is one of the many ways manufacturers convince folks to purchase their products.Many
people
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 argue that advertisement still persuades us to buy things while others are of the opinion that it is ubiquitous so
people
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 no longer regard them.
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 essay would discuss both views as well as state my opinion. I think society is more conscious and aware
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 they purchase products for what it offers than what it is advertised for. On the one hand,manufacturers utilize the persuasive power of
commercials
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 to sell their products.These
commercials
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 are made interesting and are repeatedly seen on various social media platforms,televisions,newspapers etc,
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 repetition has a way of playing with the mind as
people
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 become interested in things they see on a daily basis.
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,in the music industry,artists pay radio stations and television channels to play their tune daily,the replay of
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 piece draws our attention and sparks interest and likes for the music.
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,adverts make the public aware of a particular
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 without having to research about it as information is brought to the doorstep of consumers
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 those in need of the commodity can easily be enticed to purchase it.
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,advertisements have become so popular and common that
people
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 pay little attention to them.
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 is because communities are more knowledgeable that some
commercials
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 are overhyped and do not really offer what they advertise.
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,research has shown that most adverts exploit the mind ,showing the public the good side of the brand without truly showing them what the
product
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 really stands for.
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, these adverts show better quality of the
product
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 than what is actually produced for the public.
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 act by marketers has dented the perception of advertisements by society and they tend to dismiss them anytime they come across one. In conclusion,
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 advertisements play a major role in
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 sales,I am of the opinion that
people
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 downplay
commercials
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 as they are delusional and misleading.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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