What are the possible advantages and drawbacks of being a professional athlete?

Sport promotes mental and physical health. Everybody needs to exercise for keeping healthy.
, being a professional
is so hard and needs lots of
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It seems that exercises may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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essay I write about the benefits and drawbacks of professional
. There are oodles of advantages of exercising professional. The
advantage is being famous. When an
plays professionally and becomes a professional
, he or she will start to play in national champions. She or he will start to play in national champions.
, she will be shown on tv.
As a result
, he or she was seen by people and everybody will know him. The
advantage is earning more money. as we know, when someone is famous, the country press will invite him or her for their advertising. So, he or she can earn money in different ways.
being a professional
has lots of benefits, it has some disadvantages too. The
one is that
have to hard practice every day for many years.
For example
, professional football players have to spend 5 hours a day running and 2 hours on bodybuilding and they have to play football when they are 16 years old. The
disadvantages are hard to diet. Professional
have to eat special food because hard practices need food with lots of calories and protein.
For example
, professional football players have to eat 2 potatoes with 5 eggs every day. So, they cannot eat every food. In summary, being famous and earning more money are two benefits of
a professional
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professional athletes
a professional athlete

The indefinite article a may not be required with the plural noun athletes in this sentence. Consider removing the article, or changing the noun to singular.

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, it has some disadvantages too. The
is that an
needs to hard practice for many years and the
is that he or she has to get a hard diet.
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