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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foregin country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

#people #reason #language #travel #work #foregin #country #someone
Some
people
 believe that the only reason for acquiring a foreign
language
 is
so as
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to
travel
 or
work
 in
abroad
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a abroad
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 city.
However
, some consider that these are not the only correct choice. Why
people
 should obtain
the
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a
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second
language
. Generally, I think we could
learning
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learn
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 any
lanugages
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languages
language
 for not only
travel
 or
work
. With the advance of globalisation, more and more
people
 can go abroad easily.
such
 as
travel
 or
work
.
Therefore
 some
people
 consider that learning
a foreign languages
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a foreign language
foreign languages
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 is in order to
travel
 and
work
. If someone
have
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has
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ability
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the ability
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 to speak
second
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a second
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language
, like English, you will have more opportunities to get a
hig
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high
 salary job.
That is
cause
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the cause
a cause
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of
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apply
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some transaction business companies need the talented person who can
speaks
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speak
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foreign
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a foreign
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language
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languages
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.
Additionally
,
people
 who go o
travel
 can speak
local
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the local
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language
 have benefit to get fluent conservation with
local
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a local
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 person, even can ask the route if you get
lose
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lost
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 in abroad.
Nevertheless
, some
people
 say that
travel
 and
work
 are not the only correct reason
to
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for
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 acquiring
foreign
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a foreign
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language
. There have many advantages to
learn
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learning
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different
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a different
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language
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languages
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. One of the benefits is that has
positive
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a positive
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affect
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effect
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for
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on
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 your international concept because obtaining
the
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a
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second
language
 can abroad your
language
 field.
For instance
,
although
 I am Taiwanese, I can understand English,
then
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and then
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 I can absorb some global art information from
read
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reading
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 foreign art
magazine
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magazines
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 or books. The
others advantages
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other advantage
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 is that has
good
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a good
the good
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 function for our brain because
switch
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switching
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 over
different
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to different
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language
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languages
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 can
makes
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make
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 our brain more
flexibility
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flexible
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. In my opinion, I agree with
this
 talk Learning foreign have
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many
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any
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reason
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reasons
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, but someone
consider
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considers
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 that
work
 and tour are the only cause. Someone
think
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thinks
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 that these are not
only
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the only
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answer
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answers
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. Overall, I think we could
obtaining
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obtain
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foreign
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a foreign
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language
for
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of
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 any
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origin
orign
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origin
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