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There is a problem with the road outside of your house. Write a letter to your local councillor. In your letter: - Introduce yourself - explain what the problem is - tell the councillor what you would like to be done

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to bring to your notice the condition of a road in
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 town, which is impacting me and many others in my neighbourhood. My name is Peter Lynch, and my house is on
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Avenue Street in
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downtown of
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Toronto city.
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 is my place of residence for 8 years now.
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, during the elections, I voted for your party because
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 was one of the key agendas in the promises that your party made for the
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 few years. I am writing on behalf of all the
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 in my vicinity, and we all are facing very serious problems due to the condition of the road. It has developed many big potholes which are getting bigger with each rainy day passing by.
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, my vehicle has
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 got damaged due to these water-filled potholes as the depth was not visible. In general, I believe, it is the responsibility of the City's Council to keep a track of
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 issues, that too at the prime location
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downtown.
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, I want to request you now to get
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 road repaired on priority, and if the repair activity will be time taking,
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 at least get the potholes filled for the time being. I hope you will understand the gravity of the above said concerns and take necessary
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. Yours faithfully, Peter Lynch

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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