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Some countries spend a lot of money on making it easier to use bicycles in cities, why? Is this the best way to solve traffic problems?

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It is common for many governments to invest in promoting cycling and related infrastructure to reduce the use of /(using
cars
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 and motorcycles in
cities
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 can help improve the bad situation of
traffic
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 to some extent, I don't think
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 is a perfect solution and these
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 many steps can be taken by authorities. Ahmad: Societies have always been trying to improve using bikes via related infrastructure to reduce
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 jams and using privet
cars
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 by investing money in
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 can help boost the bad situation /circumstance of
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 to some extent( practically), I do not believe
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 solution is on top of the solution’s priorities. On one hand (In terms of issues), travelling by bicycle is not conducive and available for everyone in
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 and it requires continuous maintenance and investment. To start with, due to the long distance and time consumption of commuting, it is obviously inconvenient for everyone to go to work by bike on a daily basis.
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 , with the development of urbanization, an increasing number of citizens move out to the countryside, it is definitely impossible for them to travel to the city centre by bicycles on high roads or expressways.
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 , public facilities,
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 as cycling lane and sharing bicycles, requires financial support from governments on time, or a lack of maintenance or management could cause cycling unavailable.
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) Regarding solutions ( , governments can take other more effective steps to handle
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 problems,
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 as introducing strict laws (imposing strict laws)and improving public transport.
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 , the most efficient solution is to set a maximum consumption of gas for private vehicles on a weekly or monthly basis.
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 , another measure is to charge extra money when travellers drive on their own within urban areas, in order to encourage them to share their
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 with their colleagues or friends. These methods above can dramatically reduce the number of
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 in
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 , improvement and development of public transport are necessary, because it can provide more travelling options for these residents who choose alternative ways. In conclusion, riding bicycles is a good way to reduce the use of private
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 ,
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 , I don't think it is the best way to handle
traffic
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 problems, because it has many drawbacks and is not available for everyone. At the same time, there are many other actions which can be taken to deal with ( which address
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