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Some people always want to explore new things whether it is food or place to roam whereas on the other wants to do the same things which are known to them. In this essay I shall discuss both views followed by my opinion.

#people #food #place
On one side, some
people
 are more confident and risk-takers. They like to have fun in their
life
 with new
things
. Some are foodies and always want to try new
food
items
 while visiting a place with their friends or family.
Moreover
, they
also
 like to explore new places to visit, not the same place every time.
For instance
, many YouTube bloggers visit different sites, try different
food
, and give their opinion about those locations and
food
items
. On top of
this
, Globalization shrunk
this
 planet into a small village. So,
people
 travel and make new friends and learn about their culture.
On the other hand
, some
people
 are comfortable doing the same
things
 daily. They do not like to take risks in trying something new with their clothes,
food
items
, or locations. They have been in their comfort zone for years and do not want to follow new stuff.
For instance
, older
people
 do not want to learn about smartphones and are comfortable with their old mobiles.
Moreover
,
people
 do not want to risk their lives while experiencing a new sports game where they could lose their lives. In my opinion, individuals should try new
items
 to enjoy their
life
. The
person
 will never feel bored, and there always be new experiences and
things
 to learn.
This
 way, a
person
's learning skills will be enhanced and feel more confident.
Also
, a
person
 can be more successful, and the future will be bright.
For instance
, a recent survey suggests that the salary of a
person
 who used to switch companies every three years is more than that of a
person
 who has been in the same company for many years. So, I think
people
 should keep trying stuff in new ways. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that individuals should explore
things
 to avoid boredom in
life
 and learn new
things
 to have better opportunities in their
life
. .
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