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Many cities have areas where cars,taxis and buses are only used. Is this a positive or a negative development? What are the effects of this on individuals and society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience

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Transportation is an issue in most areas and the only means are taxis and buses.
This
 is a negative development in my opinion and
this
 essay is going to discuss how it affects individuals and society at large.
To begin
 with, limited means of
transport
 affect the inhabitants of the community.
This
 is because there would be difficulties in accessing cars to work as there are no trains which can accommodate quite a large number of
people
.
Also
,
this
 would result in exorbitant charges from drivers of taxis and buses as they will now be serving as the only source of commuting. In cases of emergencies, getting access to a car to
transport
 someone to the hospital would be difficult as well.
For example
, pregnant women living in
such
 cities would have to find alternative means of
transport
 in cases where they go into labour during odd hours.
This
 would deter
people
 from settling in
such
 a city as transportation is one of the factors
people
 consider before moving to a new location.
Secondly
, fewer
transport
 options have a toll on society.
This
 reduces trade and business opportunities as many investors would not work in an area with a limited number of cars.
This
 would make the transfer of goods difficult.
In addition
, tourist sites in
such
 communities would see less patronage as well.
This
 would lead to a retrogression in the development of the city.
For instance
, investors from Europe would most likely build a factory for production which would
also
 serve as a source of employment for the youth of the town in a town which is developed and has more cars than one with limited means of
transport
. In conclusion, I believe an increased number of
transport
 systems would be beneficial to society as limited means of
transport
makes
Wrong verb form
make
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 it difficult for
people
 to reside in
such
 communities and
also
pushes
Correct subject-verb agreement
push
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 potential investors away.
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