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It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your ownknowledge or experience.

In
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 day and age, the ever-increasing life expectations of human beings and their desire to lead a higher quality life tend to make them more
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-taker person compared to
people
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 in the past. It is a commonly held idea that it might have hindrances to run a serious
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, but I believe that taking small bets is a necessity to achieve your goals; attempting to outline some key reasons for
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. By taking a foolish
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, individuals may sacrifice their lives or assets
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 experience dangerous psychological side effects. Having a stressful lifestyle, many are voracious enough to reach their ambitions, most of whom will be defeated, as making rational decisions in difficult conditions is bound to be way more complicated.
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, those working in online trade marketing, buying and selling shares of the companies, or those trading in the cryptocurrency market, who invest in valueless coins (so-called shit coins) end up losing their money.
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, tolerating so much stress would have negative effects on their behaviour, making them treat aggressively with
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 in their vicinity.
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, a lack of experience and knowledge can lead to losing
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 takers' wealth, and at the same time, it might negatively affect their psychological well-being.
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, individuals would absolutely benefit from taking a
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 if it was a calculated one. Provided that individuals have adequate knowledge, by reading the content on the internet, books or taking advice from knowledgable
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, they can reach their aims gradually. It is undeniable that taking risks in order to earn more money, better job opportunities to make a competitive salary and studying in the best universities is required
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 the huge competition among society members, at present.
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, so as to be accepted to be educated in high-rank universities, students should sacrifice their spare time and devote it to studying to prepare for the entrance exam.
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, to gain happiness and success, taking calculated risks is unavoidable.
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, it is true that taking blind risks could put
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 on the verge of losing their
possession
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, and
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 can have drawbacks on their
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as a consequence
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 of the stress they bear.
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, it is a necessary evil to
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 in
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 era
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 significant competition between a myriad of
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 in a community to grab your aims and a calculated way would be the solution in order to avoid the intricacies.

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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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