Sport can be used to bring people from different cultures together. It helps to foster friendliness between nations, especially when sport-based tournaments or competitions are held. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

Most
people
find
sports
events interesting and it has an advantage in uniting
people
from other diversity together.
This
essay
,
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will elaborate on how
sports
can unite
people
with different cultures
more
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especially during sport-based
tournament
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tournaments

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or
competition
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competitions

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. I must say I totally agree
to
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the above statement.
Firstly
,
sports
event is a great avenue for physical fitness and general mental health.
This
helps to
strengthens
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patriotism amongst
countries
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, during
football
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a football

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competition
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competitions

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between two
countries
like England and Germany lots of
people
from different diversities gather together to have a view of the show.
In
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respect to
this
foreigners are made comfortable in different ways by providing
their
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for their

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needs especially when it comes to food,
different
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and different

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intercontinental cuisine are prepared.
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,
This
also
generate
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generates

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fund for the government which can
be use
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to develop different infrastructures within localities.
People
travel far and wide in other to participate in
different
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a different

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sports
tournament
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tournaments

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and as well explore
to
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new
environment
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environments

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and cultures, make new friends ,
learn
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and learn

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new things outside their doorstep. It encourages youngsters
the
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to the

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importance of
sports
in life regardless of culture and race. Again,
sport
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sports

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competitions
such
as football, basketball, volleyball, and
weight- lifting
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weight-lifting

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makes
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one
to
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know
there
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capacity and how to improve in different aspect of life.
Sports
tournament
encourages various
countries
on the of development , the need to adapt to
new
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a new
the new

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environment ,
communicate
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and communicate

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with
people
with
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in

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common English language without feeling isolated or having
inferiority
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an inferiority

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complex . In summary,
sports
tournament
is pivotal in
development
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the development

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and exposure to new things amongst
countries
,
strengthen
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friendship and as well generate fund for them.
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