If you answer the question, “Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?“, with a Yes, then you have to present more advantages than disadvantages. Conversely, if you choose to go with a No, then you have to include more arguments for disadvantages compared to advantages.

Some
people
contend that there are many pressing concerns that a country must resolve before putting emphasis on the
arts
.
However
, I personally think that
arts
are an essential part of a culture, and it is quite fair to allocate funds to preserve and develop
arts
. Admittedly, there are some justifications by
people
who oppose spending on promoting
arts
.
First
of all, most
art
projects are expensive with no obvious outcomes that have direct
relations
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to a nation’s income.
For example
, the monument of Kebangkitan Pahlawan in Malang city that adsorbed almost 1 billion rupiahs does not attract
people
that much.
Besides
,
art
is not a critical aspect of the sustainability of
human’s
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life
.
Human’s
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life
will not disappear just because they have less taste
of
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aesthetics.
However
, I still support that the government should allocate a budget for the
arts
.
Arts
are part of a culture and over time become the identity of a nation, eventually,
arts
could be a major source of income for them.
For instance
, Bali is an island in Indonesia, where millions of visitors come each year to experience the combination of conventional values and modern lifestyles. The government in Indonesia invests more than a
third
of its budget to maintain its traditional
arts
.
Furthermore
,
art
makes a
life
worth living. Like food,
art
is a supplement for the human soul. It has a magnificent power to aid buildings, roads, parks, and everything, with its uniqueness. Just imagine how empty a room would be if there is no painting or decoration on the wall!
Art
is enhancing
people
’s
life
by leveraging their experiences and empowering
people
to possess beautiful imaginations. To conclude, supporting
arts
is important for a government as it would enhance the quality of
life
either by improving the tourism industry or by providing a better artistic facility.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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