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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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People have different views that whether it is better to agree with a bad condition like an unsatisfactory job or lack of
money
 or try our best to make these situations improved. In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss both views and in the end, I will give my own opinion by providing relevant examples. There are several reasons why we do not have to accept these situations.
Firstly
, an unsatisfactory job caused a kind of unwilling sense for individuals for resuming their occupations.
Secondly
, due to lack of
money
 people are less able to use recreational facilities, which is not good for the spirit of humanity.
Finally
, a shortage of
money
 led to poor quality of life.
For example
, using public services like health and education centres cost a lot of
money
.
On the other hand
, jobs and
money
 are like a chain which are relevant to each other. It means that if you have a great job which you like ,
then
 you can work more efficiently. One of the reasons that required us to improve our income is that it facilitates the way of living.
Furthermore
, it provides us with more leisure which we can take advantage of it after working for a while.
In addition
, we can make use of various public services in the world.
For instance
, we can send our children abroad for higher education. In conclusion,
although
 there are some people who have suffered from their undesirable jobs, they have to try their best for improving these sad conditions for providing a desirable life for their selves.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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