Some people think that government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
NOWADAYS,
OBESITY
PREVALENCE HAS BEEN RISING AMONGST Use synonyms
CHILDREN
. WHILE ONE WIDELY HOLD THE OPINION THAT THE MAIN REASON FOR Use synonyms
THIS
PROBLEM IS GOVERNMENTS' IRRESPONSIBLE ATTITUDES, OTHERS DISAGREE. I TOTALLY AGREE WITH THE LATTER SIDE OF ARGUE AND Linking Words
THIS
ESSAY WILL EXPLAIN WHY Linking Words
CHILDREN
'S HEALTH IS RELATED TO THEIR Use synonyms
PARENTS
' ATTITUDES RATHER THAN GOVERNMENTS.
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FIRST
AND FOREMOST, Linking Words
CHILDREN
ARE LIKE SPONGES WHILE THEY ARE BEING UPBROUGHT. BECAUSE OF Use synonyms
THIS
FACT, IF Linking Words
PARENTS
ENCOURAGED THEIR Use synonyms
CHILDREN
TO EAT HEALTHY FOOD, Use synonyms
OBESITY
WOULD BE LESSENED. TO AN EXTENT, WHEN A CHILD IS SERVED FRENCH FRIES FOUR TIMES A WEEK OR NOT PREVENTED FROM PROCESSED FOOD BY Use synonyms
PARENTS
, GAINING WEIGHT OR Use synonyms
OBESITY
WOULD BE SEEN AS AN INEVITABLE CONSEQUENCE. Use synonyms
BESIDES
COOKING OR PROVIDING HEALTHY FOODS, Linking Words
PARENTS
SHOULD BE ROLE MODELS TO THEIR Use synonyms
CHILDREN
THROUGH THEIR EATING HABITS.
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SECONDLY
, THE LACK OF PHYSICAL ACTIVITIES OR SPENDING A LOT OF TIME IN FRONT OF COMPUTERS ARE THE OTHER REASONS FOR BEING AN OBESE. AT THAT POINT, ENCOURAGING Linking Words
CHILDREN
TO SPORTS OR CREATING AN ENVIRONMENT CONDUCIVE TO FACE-TO-FACE ACTIVITIES CAN BE COUNTED AS Use synonyms
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' RESPONSIBILITIES Use synonyms
INSTEAD
OF GOVERNMENTS. Linking Words
FOR INSTANCE
, RESTRICTED COMPUTER HOURS OR COMPULSORY PHYSICAL ACTIVITIES WITH FAMILY MEMBERS CAN BE ORGANISED BY Linking Words
PARENTS
. LESS IMMOBILITY AND MORE ACTIVITY MAY HELP TO BURN CALORIES AND PREVENT Use synonyms
CHILDREN
FROM BEING AN OBESE.
TO SUM UP, Use synonyms
PARENTS
HAVE AN ESSENTIAL ROLE IN THEIR Use synonyms
CHILDREN
'S HEALTH. AS LONG AS THEY DO NOT TAKE A CHARGE OF THEIR Use synonyms
CHILDREN
'S DAILY ROUTINES, Use synonyms
OBESITY
WILL BE A SERIOUS AND UNPREVENTABLE PROBLEM AMONG Use synonyms
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite