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Now-a-days many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company. What could be the advantages and disadvantages of being self-employed?

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Currently, most
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prefering
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preferring
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employement
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employment
, rather than working at an organization. Self-employed
people
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 are mostly self-learners, they always want to achieve their goals.
People
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also
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 choose to be an employee in an organization. In
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both sides of being self-employed. Regarding the advantages, Entrepreneurs are
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involved
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employement
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employment
. These
people
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 prefer the
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business
bussiness
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business
 field mostly. One of the most significant benefits of being self-employed is freedom.
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employment
 leads to more productivity and satisfaction. Self-employed
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 are good decision-makers. They will not have any particular timings to do
work
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, when they are fascinated will complete their
work
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.
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, self-employed
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 will not start their
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. In terms of feasible negative outcomes, some
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 think it is
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 to be self-employed, so most
people
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 prefer to be an employee in an organization. Mostly,
people
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 may not get monthly profits. And self-employed
people
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 may not get pensions, annual leave, etc. To conclude, it is better to be self-employed when they have tremendous technical skills like
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an entrepreneur
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entrepreneur
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entrepreneurs
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.
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, entrepreneurs should consider both benefits and risks before
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setting up
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setting up
 a
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business
bussiness
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business
.
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