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Schools have the social responsibility to discourage children from eating junk food. Others think it is the parent's responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Eating junk
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 is unhealthy for everyone but especially for the
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 provided that, who has the social responsibility to discourage them is it the schools or is it the
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? In
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 essay, I will discuss both sides of the coin and which side can be more impactful in encouraging to eat healthy
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. Schools can play a vital role in a child's development, including their eating habits.
Children
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 spend a major amount of time in school among their peers and if good eating traditions are instituted
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 it would prevent kids from eating junk
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 could only work when school staff gives them good tastier alternatives to eat.
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, in general, are picky eaters wide variety of healthy meal options are required. When it comes to
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children
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 might expect more freedom in choosing what they could eat. It becomes difficult when
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 are put on a healthy diet
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 could become a problem if
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 is enforced strictly and not in a healthy manner as
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 move out they usually don't follow the strict diet various studies have shown that since the diet was enforced strictly kids would wanna eat something different and they would
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 eat something which was previously restricted and it disturbs their eating habits. In conclusion, Both schools and
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 play a vital role for kids to have good eating habits and avoid eating junk
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 could only be a success when educational institutions can educate the importance of a healthy dietary regime concurrently
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 can establish a healthy relationship with meals in general by not totally restricting any unhealthy
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 but limiting the quantity.

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