In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this massage?

There has been a controversy about whether parents should tell their children that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. I think its advantages outweigh its disadvantages and my reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.
First
, they can establish self-confidence. As we know, self-confidence is of the utmost importance nowadays, and it is derived from a person's family background.
For instance
, if a person is told since a kid that nothing is impossible,
then
when he faces any obstacles in the future, he won't lose his courage and believes he can surmount these obstructions.
On the contrary
, if a person who receives his family education is the other way around,
then
when he starts doing some real business, he will become indecisive and afraid of failure. It's worth mentioning that good self-confidence is vital for social intercourse; your personal potency can be promoted by the confidence you radiate.
Second
, children's ambition can be nourished. It's expected that some parents support their kids' dreams; some don't.
For example
. There has been a story,
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farmer's son who wants to study at a top university and be a wealthy man in the future.
However
, his father doesn't support him and calls it an unrealistic dream. In
this
case, the son's family shapes his view and affects his outlook. If he has been told since a kid that everything has been achievable, the result might be different.
On the other hand
,
this
way of education can bring arrogance to kids.
For instance
, today's young people are weak at dealing with their social circle, especially their superiors. They think as long as they have the ability to do
this
job, a promotion is in sight;
nevertheless
, the reality is not always rosy, because luck and other factors are crucial as well sometimes. In conclusion, I believe the merits of telling kids that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough outstrip its demerits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Encouragement
  • Motivation
  • Determination
  • Work Ethic
  • Persistence
  • Self-esteem
  • Confidence
  • Challenges
  • Unrealistic Expectations
  • Disappointment
  • Frustration
  • Limitations
  • External Factors
  • Pressure
  • Stress
  • Anxiety
  • Mental Health
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