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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had huge negative impacts on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Since the era of ,technology lots of
people
 have seen a convenient means to communicate with distant friends and family. As much as quite a number of
people
 believe that social networking
such
 as Facebook has had a huge negative effect on
people
 and
the
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society I do not agree with
such
 expression. Due to the nature of
people
's occupations,
one
 on
one
 communication or visit to friends and family is unfavourable and most times impossible. Before the era of modern device that's in the 1980s
people
 who travel far finds it difficult to communicate with their friends or loved ones and
this
 causes lots of instability among family members , sometimes they sit outside till midnight with the hope of welcoming them but to no avail. But since the use of mobile phones, communication between
one
 another despite the distances is made easier, convenient, safer, and highly appreciated.
Secondly
, the use of
the
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social networks has impacted more knowledge and broadened our horizons. A lot of
people
 who barely have time to go to
physically
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 classes can as well learn through online tutorials even at their place of comfort and satisfaction.
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 of
website
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 generates Funds both for the government and individuals ,
for example
, most businessmen and ladies display their products online for
people
 to see and patronize them and
this
 as well saved them cost for shop rent. Again,
this
 gives an opportunity for individuals to have an idea about what is happening around them globally.
On the other hand
, in as much as false information can be spread through
this
 means it is the duty of the government to implement laws and guidelines on how vital information should be shared and
also
, appoint sensible individuals who could apprehend those that default the rules in spreading wrong information. In summary, regardless of the demerits
on
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 what some
people
 think about social networking , I feel its' of optimal benefit to everyone in terms of communication to strengthen bonds amongst loved ones and family, broaden
one
's knowledge and easy buying and selling online.
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