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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had huge negative impacts on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Since the era of ,technology lots of
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 have seen a convenient means to communicate with distant friends and family. As much as quite a number of
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 believe that social networking
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 as Facebook has had a huge negative effect on
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society I do not agree with
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 expression. Due to the nature of
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's occupations,
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 on
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 communication or visit to friends and family is unfavourable and most times impossible. Before the era of modern device that's in the 1980s
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 who travel far finds it difficult to communicate with their friends or loved ones and
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 causes lots of instability among family members , sometimes they sit outside till midnight with the hope of welcoming them but to no avail. But since the use of mobile phones, communication between
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 another despite the distances is made easier, convenient, safer, and highly appreciated.
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social networks has impacted more knowledge and broadened our horizons. A lot of
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 who barely have time to go to
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 classes can as well learn through online tutorials even at their place of comfort and satisfaction.
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 of
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 generates Funds both for the government and individuals ,
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, most businessmen and ladies display their products online for
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 to see and patronize them and
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 as well saved them cost for shop rent. Again,
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 gives an opportunity for individuals to have an idea about what is happening around them globally.
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, in as much as false information can be spread through
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 means it is the duty of the government to implement laws and guidelines on how vital information should be shared and
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, appoint sensible individuals who could apprehend those that default the rules in spreading wrong information. In summary, regardless of the demerits
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 what some
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 think about social networking , I feel its' of optimal benefit to everyone in terms of communication to strengthen bonds amongst loved ones and family, broaden
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's knowledge and easy buying and selling online.
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