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Traditional and modern life -question based..with the development of Norden society in the loss of traditional ways of life is it important to keep our tradition ways of life?how can this be achieved?

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Tradition
 and
culture
 are an identity of the county. But these days
people
 are influenced by modernization.
As a result
, traditions take a back seat. It is crucial to maintain
tradition
.
This
 essay intends to discuss the importance of
tradition
. And
also
 suggest some ways to retain it. There is numerous reason for the maintenance of
tradition
.
First
 and foremost, it enhances the identity and belonging of
people
. And give them a sense of security. A recent study shows that
people
 are mentally stable
people
 who are attached to their
tradition
 and county. Another concrete reason is, helps to enhance positive development in a child if their parents teach about
tradition
 and
culture
. It helps to maintain their
behavior
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 in society according to the
culture
. There are productive ways to allocate the issuer.
First
 and foremost is educational ways. Authority can add some topics about customs.
Consequently
, children become aware of it and get curious to know more.
In addition
 to that, the government should allocate some budget for the prevention of the heritage place. And promote it by using mass media. One more suggestion to prevent
this
 adverse effect is, to make more movie and series which helps to enhance the knowledge about beliefs and
culture
.
Also
, Government should provide some money to filmmakers for trying to enhance the beauty of
culture
.
As a result
, other filmmakers are encouraged to do it. To conclude, there is numerous reason for it. But it can be solved by systematic input from the administration.
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